Need a little more time just before the group's proclamation (at the beginning)... and just a tad more time letting folks focus ON the group before moving on. But, a very good start.
I agree with Ratdog, but it is a good video. If you can make it longer then show more hog shots, and any through the lens shots you can. Action and family-what it is all about!!
If you are able to segment the screen and show more than one pig being hit at a time... that'll give you more clock time to work with? Trim the amount of time of the last two bits (hog advancing on the camera)... and the "still" of the bones with the extended time of hearing the squealing? 30 seconds is a lot of hacking from what you have already.
exactly, it was a little of an experiment. I'm self taught editor eventually going to hire some one. I've had plenty offer but so far most of them had less skill than me,